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swg0d0fmusic View Drop Down

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Topic: yOUR OPINION
Posted: February 16 2004 at 09:06

Hi everyone
id like to have your opinions about my music..
you can go hear it at http://members.tripod.com/~k0st1s/

All advices are welcome....

I play sth between Pink Floyd and Porcupine Tree..

Although i have many other influences...
Thanks in advance for your opinion...

" This will be the future...
Every home is wired.."

swg0d0fmusic View Drop Down

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Posted: February 17 2004 at 11:19

Let me get this straight...

Either noone went to my site...
Or nobody liked my music...

I want bad opinions too...
I want some advices from prog fellows...

" This will be the future...
Every home is wired.."

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Posted: February 17 2004 at 11:38

I think the problem is the link you posted. I don't werk!!! Try Again.

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Posted: February 17 2004 at 11:40

someitmes it goes offline...

bu most of the time is online....

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Every home is wired.."

Aztech

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Posted: March 12 2004 at 17:04

Hi swg0d0fmusic

Since no one else critiqued I decided to do so.This is not meant to offend its just an honest contructive critism in my opinion. Here it goes :

Good effort, has potential, obviously Pink Floyd inspired.

Overall Too simplistic .Layering different tracks on top of each other does not make it complex.Some good melody ideas ,but too repetetive and not prog enough to my taste.

The synth is mostly atmospheric and not really played.Some good guitar riffs.The drum is a beat box cold and boring.

Empty head is not very good .I see your attempting the first Floyd albums but you missed.Your song goes everywhere and anywhere and doesn't fit and the organ is ordinary.

Sorry to be so harsh but its honest and with time I'm sure you'll do better. You do have potetial.

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Posted: March 12 2004 at 17:19

Good job.

Yer version of Moonloop? Has some promise. Demo quality. Could use some trade-offs with the keys during the soloing sections. Needs more dynamics, not volume, just a bit of attack.

Who's the female voice? She got a head cold?

Empty Heads? Lousy synth patch. Too much of nothing happening. A bit boring. The Potential is there.

Keep stroking yer strat and it'll be nice to you.

Aztech

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Posted: March 12 2004 at 17:26

Oh yeah I forgot about her voice and weird dialog.

It is long, Inappropriate,nasal,and I would delete that part.

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Posted: March 12 2004 at 19:03

Can I call you "sw" (or would you prefer "God?" )?

Here's my take. The first track is "immature," but has potential within Floydian-influenced prog. I think it would benefit from a defined "theme," stated fairly early on by the guitar - perhaps just after the female v.o. (which, unlike most here, I felt was well done). It might also benefit from more interesting, perhaps even "propulsive" (driving) drums/percussion. (I realize that may be anathema to what you were trying to create.)

Re "Empty Heads," it seems to be in two parts, the first lasting a minute, the second a little over two minutes. The first part was a very interesting "idea," but I don't think it was executed as well as it might have been. I don't really have any suggestions here. Re "part 2," it also needs "more" in order to maintain a listener's interest.

Whatever you do, don't get discouraged. There is definite potential in what you are doing. Keep at it, and "progress" (a truly apropos word here).

Peace.

Hammar

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Posted: March 13 2004 at 09:30

I like the dreamscape intro of the first track, though I feel I have heard it before. It's not that I think it's plagiarism, but the production and riffs (specially bass and keyboard) are simple. I miss distinctiveness. The idea is ok, but I think you can do a lot with melodies and arrangements. In addition, the guitar is sometimes not tuned in, which is annoying.

The second track sounds unfinished, made by coincidences. Maybe that's your intension?

Despite the criticism, I think you are on the right way. It seems to me that you are motivated and that's important!!

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Posted: March 13 2004 at 13:02

My brick in your wall…

I have downloaded only two tracks (4.SW "J" n Edge classic 5:06 and 9.Empty heads 3:50).

The other tracks are not available.

First I agree with what was said here :

a bit immature but a lot potential

obviousness of influences : the first track is Porcupine Tree (more than Pink Floyd). I think Hammar knows Alan Parson’s Project when he said " I feel I have heard it before ".

I don’t want to dissect your music like the others but I’d like to give you some suggestions :

Let the time mature your music and suppress the evidence of influences. All composers (as I) have known this phase.

Don’t play what you like to hear in other musicians but find inside of you your own music, your sense.

Try to forget all what you think or what you feel, and don’t say "I’ll try this or this" but let the stream comes from the bottom of you.

Music is irrational, musicians should be mediums not technicians, so forget the devices, enjoy…

Try an association with another musician (rhythmic one) to give more muscles and bones to your music but find the (your) answer yourself.

Have a rich and good life and wonderful relationships to nourish your music.

And don’t listen what we try to say.

Except that I liked your first song and the first part of the second even the late is a little "rough".

Don't give up !

Edited by Tauhd Zaïa

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Aztech

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Posted: March 16 2004 at 12:02

Taud Your review of his music was nice and encouraging, but I wasn't being disrespectful nor anyone else for that matter .I was just being Honest and Direct but still encouraged him. I just didn't sugar coat it.

I wonder if he read this ? I doubt it . Maybe someone should email it to him.

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Posted: March 16 2004 at 13:03

Aztech wrote:

I don't understand the "problem"

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Posted: March 16 2004 at 13:12

Aztec feels guilty about being too hard on SW.

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Posted: March 16 2004 at 13:34

danbo wrote:

Aztec feels guilty about being too hard on SW.

Yes but it is what he feels

He was honnest, so what is the problem ? ()

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Aztech

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Posted: March 16 2004 at 17:52

Oh no problem and no guilt either , just pointing out I was not being disrespectful as you mentionned Thaud ,thats all Wink

quote : " I don’t want to dissect your music like the others but I’d like to give you some suggestions "

OOOOUUUUPPPPSSSS am I ever red in the face While pasting this I realised you said dissect not disrespect .... my apologies Embarrassed i'm blushing now !