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Shakespeare ![]() Forum Senior Member ![]() Joined: July 18 2006 Status: Offline Points: 7744 |
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http://www.progarchives.com/artist.asp?id=608
These are just some really minor dents I felt compelled to point out. Firstly, personally I don't think the acronym "in my opinion" is altogether appropriate for a (semi)objective and (somewhat)formal biography. That's just me though. The second thing to point out is the redundancy in "With their final album 'Western Culture' is the final HENRY COW release...". Again, just some really minute details that the perfectionist in me couldn't bare to leave unfixed - especially for such a prolific band. Sorry for being so obsessive of details. ![]() |
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The IMO made the bio somewhat personal, no? What if: Their first album, "Legend" (read "Leg End"), is considered by many their most accessible, and makes a good starter. Just an idea...![]() |
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Shakespeare ![]() Forum Senior Member ![]() Joined: July 18 2006 Status: Offline Points: 7744 |
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That's perfect.
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I have updated with:
HENRY COW's first album, "Legend" (read "Leg End"), is considered by many their most accessible, and makes a good starter.
...because the next sentence also started with "their" as was originally used here, too.
And I simply removed With their final album from the Western Culture reference.
Josh, Guigo, How does that sit with you both?
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And I forgot to mention that in this case "obsessive" is good!
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Those changes are perfect.
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