Help with a rhyme

How about Skoda, off roader?

Skoda/Toyota sounds better, but thanks anyway.

If you're changing a car brand - you might as well change both rhymes. I'm not sure how many children are familiar with Coda. How bout Peugeot and Renault?

clarke2001 wrote: If you're changing a car brand - you might as well change both rhymes. I'm not sure how many children are familiar with Coda. How bout Peugeot and Renault?

That’s actually a very good idea – if I (or someone else) could find another rhyme that’s not been used in the book already. I’ll keep it open for now, and I appreciate any suggestions.

What if I used Opel Kadett/Chevrolet Corvette? Maybe that’s better than the obscure Coda …

Edited by refugee - April 19 2012 at 10:13

Mercedes Benz / Kia Carens?

someone_else wrote: Mercedes Benz / Kia Carens?

Very good suggestion! I have to think about it – if I choose it, I would have to do another replacement, becase the cars mentioned in this passage are:

Chrysler, Ferrari, Callaway Coupé, Audi, Mercedes Benz, Alfa Romeo, Fiat, Ford Mondeo, Bentley, Bugatti, Jeep, Maserati, Passat, Lamborghini, Jaguar, Morris Mini, Porsche, Peugeot, Rolls Royce and Renault.

Then comes this troublesome line which includes:

Aston Martin, Skoda, Seat and Toyota.

After that it’s Saab, Suzuki, Chevrolet and Mazda.

So If I choose the Mercedes, I’ll have to replace the first one with another brand/model, and if I choose the Corvette, I have to find another car to replace the second Chevrolet.

I’ve made up my mind. It’s Mercedes Benz/Kia Carens. I replaced the first Mercedes with Aston Martin (it was easy to make it fit with the rythm, and I couldn’t use it later anyway). So thanks a lot to all of you, and special thanks to Moris (clarke2001) for making me think "outside the box" and someone_else for finding the solution!

Gerinski wrote: aginor wrote: Skoda --> Pagani Zonda, Toyota --> AC Cobra maybe i have no idea, but the rules for rhyming phoneticly is quite strickt   The Pagani Zonda would rhyme better with Honda.

Zonda and Honda is indeed a perfect rhyme, and it would have worked well. But now I’ve sent my translation to the editor, and I’m happy with the Benz/Carens rhyme.

Btw, I did this translation for the Swedish Läsrörelsen whose goal is to make children read more and develop a good language. The book will be printed in several hundred thousand copies and given to all the children who choose a Bok Happy Meal menue at a McDonalds’s restaurant in Norway. So it’s one half idealism, one half big business. Last year I translated some wonderful nonsense verses by the Swedish poet Lennart Hellsing, so they really choose high quality for the children.