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K00l Prog Guruz
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Topic: prog lyrics Posted: January 21 2005 at 12:38 |
Rate on ten
Ok, My grade 8 english class had a project over the Holidays for ENglish and we had to write some lyrics for poem time, so I decided to write some PROG LYRICS: its called SWARM OF FLIES
I can hear it coming in the dark night I can see it in the light & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp;
And it gives me a fright, Oh Lord...
Well, if you told me you wee frowning I woulld wink and smile I'd see it in your frowning face friend WHo am i? WHo am I? Well, I saw that you looked I saw it with my special eyes So you can put on the grin, I know where you've been It's all bee n a swarm of flies........ (a metaphor )
I can hear it coming in the dark night I can see it in the light & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp;
And it gives me a fright, Oh Lord...
Remember dont feel sorry
That we had a fun time the last time we met But I know the reason why you keep your silence up, no you don't fool me The pain doesn't show; but the pain still flows It's not that weird to me
Like a pck of flies, of flies, of flies
OF flies!
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K00l Prog Guruz
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Posted: January 21 2005 at 12:39 |
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"The world is in your hands, now use it." Good'ol Phil
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Posted: January 21 2005 at 12:45 |
dogs hit !
birds hit !
Its a miss!

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Posted: January 21 2005 at 12:47 |
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something pretentious
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Posted: January 21 2005 at 13:31 |
No, KPG its like your Posts:
"I wish that for just one time
you could stand inside my shoes
You'd know what a drag it is to see you."
Sorry Bob
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sigod
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Posted: January 21 2005 at 15:46 |
Oh, my favourite bits were the;
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Hangedman
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Posted: January 21 2005 at 18:52 |
good job Guruz! You're sure to get an A in poetry class! by any chance was your song inspired by hmmm.... Phil Collins' in the air tonight?
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Rob The Good
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Posted: January 21 2005 at 20:59 |
You gotta love originality
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Unfortunately, John came fifth and was stuck with a toaster.
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Rob The Plant
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Posted: January 21 2005 at 21:46 |
I really don't think I've ever heard anything like that before! I AM DUTCH11
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K00l Prog Guruz
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Posted: January 21 2005 at 22:20 |
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"The world is in your hands, now use it." Good'ol Phil
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Blacksword
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Posted: January 22 2005 at 16:28 |
I love the metaphor about a swarm of flies. That is such a romantic image. Uncle Phil would be proud KPG, you're something of a budding young Byron aren't you?
Keep up the good work! 
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Posted: January 22 2005 at 16:37 |
I detect a subtle subtext concerning the filthy habit that teenage boys have of giving themselves pleasure manually - I refer to no less than the sin of Onan!
Have a care youing sir, or you could look like this before your 18th birthday!

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K00l Prog Guruz
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Posted: January 22 2005 at 19:21 |
Well the swarm of flies ,metaphor is about how sometimes theres so much goig
on in life and sometiems your friends are annoying like flies But sometimes I want to
do an even more metaphorical poem LIKe about like a fish cauight in a bowl./ I was
going to write one about the fish in a bowl and the bowl is society and we
cant swim out, But im not done it yet. 
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Rob The Plant
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Posted: January 22 2005 at 19:24 |
Post it up. I can't wait to see more. Maybe I'll be inspired, and become a much better song writer.
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K00l Prog Guruz
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Posted: January 22 2005 at 20:09 |
I have my poem so far
YOu are in a bowl
and have no goal,
but to get out
and shout
for freedom
you look and see the fake fish wallpaper on the side
and you know they lied
and you want to go through
but how, you dont have a clue
to go to the
to the free ocean
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"The world is in your hands, now use it." Good'ol Phil
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Rob The Plant
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Posted: January 23 2005 at 01:29 |
Wow, I'm impressed K00l. The imagery, the emotion! So powerful!  I can't believe I'm talking to th enext Phil Collins!
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Arioch
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Posted: January 23 2005 at 03:06 |
You call those lyrics? I call them a train wreck!!
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Knight of the Swords
Lord of Entropy
Duke of Chaos
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Rob The Plant
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Posted: January 23 2005 at 15:04 |
I call it a masterpiece. I espcially like how you used syntax to express emotion!
...or something...
Edited by Rob The Plant
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