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David_D
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Quite impressive, and I have some ideas but could also like to hear some comments from the author.
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David_D
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Actually, I find it very impressive, and I meant comments about this poem.
Edited by David_D - November 11 2023 at 03:30 |
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David_D
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What kind of music are those lyrics for? |
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A Ballad I suppose, a bit of ambient as well
Edited by Frets N Worries - November 11 2023 at 08:31 |
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The Wheel of Time Turns, and Ages come and pass. What was, what will be, and what is, may yet fall under the shadow.
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David_D
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What is it about? |
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JD
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With all due respect David...it doesn't seem a little self explanatory to you?
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In Honour of This Day Lyric (work in progress) For This Land © JD Dinsdale 2023 We got the call at 0500 The planes were fueling up Our gear was stowed And clips were tapped Only prayer could interrupt To take our place Among the brave Surrounded by the sand A paper face to warm the heart Love's anchor in our hand We all march together Good soldiers row on row Back to flag and family By way of Oramacto We all march together For a country strong and free We all march together Into eternity
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As said, I have some ideas/thoughts about it. Edited by David_D - November 11 2023 at 12:16 |
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Let's hear it !
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David_D
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I prefer to hear yours.
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I'll let my work speak for itself.
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American Boots
American boots on Syrian soil, kindle the cauldron to bubble and boil Isis rises from the sand, melting into crowds, they plot to foil American boots on Syrian soil, blending in yet unfound Isis mix with folks in town surrounded by American soldiers all around, Syrian cobra suicide strike, “Yikes, that’s thrice this week. At the pub last night Joe got blown up with a girl in curls when the shoeshine boy blew the pub plumb down.” American boots on Syrian soil board American boats bound for American ground Love-starved wives weep for lovers, cry with mothers as they bury brothers and sons in cemetery soil. Tank snakes shoot venom, uncoil, and spoil Middle East peace, “At least there’s war in Syria again”, Said the four-star general to the congressman. -Cindy O
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fair enough
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David_D
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You're surely not just beginners, guys.
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Thanks, we all try
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The Wheel of Time Turns, and Ages come and pass. What was, what will be, and what is, may yet fall under the shadow.
Let the Dragon ride again on the winds of time... |
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here's the opening to a song I wrote called 'Child's Play" and some other favorite lines. Overall it might need some editing, and a bit of re-writing, but i'm happy with where most of it sits
Deep throated vocals of a time long past Far above the melee and moral bombast Ritualistic mornings crafted of gold Who is our God whom you have extolled? Though our truths will seldom align The Child remains to play I have yours and you have mine Time to sunshine the fears away, I hold your hand while we dine. Some night other lines: "Scared to peak at the bodies I know, You’re scared you’ll see a face that’s your own" "Back in the morning, there was a border for us apart, A boundary for lack of order, Where we all must look forward to start!" "To sit out on the playground and watch, While the wise girls down whiskey and scotch" |
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The Wheel of Time Turns, and Ages come and pass. What was, what will be, and what is, may yet fall under the shadow.
Let the Dragon ride again on the winds of time... |
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