Lyrics for my original song Antonine's wall

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   Alright well I wrote the lyrics for another song, this one is called "Antonine's Wall" and it's about the attempts of scottish natives to raid king Antonine's wall during the Roman empire, and it's written from the point of view of a native tribesman.  I'd like to know what you guys think about this one.  I don't know when my band will ever get these recorded, but any suggestions for how to improve this would help me out a lot.

Break the barrier, raid the land
Take it from the empire’s hand
Seize the wall and charge this place
Wipe the smiles off every face

Make them bow, watch them die
Antonine’s final day is nigh
Now gather around, defeat the mass
Every hour could be your last

Our blood’s been spilled upon the wet grass
But we can’t give up until we have it all
Make the mighty feel defiled and crass
For Tonight we tear down/ Antonine’s wall

Now they’ve got the army’s heft
But don’t stop ‘til there’s nothing left
Adrenaline rushes to my head
Let’s make the Roman’s see more red

Our blood’s been spilled upon the wet grass
But we can’t give up until we have it all
Make the mighty feel defiled and crass
For Tonight we tear down/ Antonine’s wall

Our blood’s been spilled upon the wet grass
And we gave up before we had it all
They made me feel defiled and crass
Will we ever tear down/ Antonine’s wall?

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geddyx12112 Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Reviewer page Forum Senior Member Joined: August 06 2009 Location: New Brunswick Status: Offline Points: 105	Topic: Lyrics for my original song Antonine's wall Posted: August 19 2009 at 17:49
	Alright well I wrote the lyrics for another song, this one is called "Antonine's Wall" and it's about the attempts of scottish natives to raid king Antonine's wall during the Roman empire, and it's written from the point of view of a native tribesman. I'd like to know what you guys think about this one. I don't know when my band will ever get these recorded, but any suggestions for how to improve this would help me out a lot. Break the barrier, raid the land Take it from the empire’s hand Seize the wall and charge this place Wipe the smiles off every face Make them bow, watch them die Antonine’s final day is nigh Now gather around, defeat the mass Every hour could be your last Our blood’s been spilled upon the wet grass But we can’t give up until we have it all Make the mighty feel defiled and crass For Tonight we tear down/ Antonine’s wall Now they’ve got the army’s heft But don’t stop ‘til there’s nothing left Adrenaline rushes to my head Let’s make the Roman’s see more red Our blood’s been spilled upon the wet grass But we can’t give up until we have it all Make the mighty feel defiled and crass For Tonight we tear down/ Antonine’s wall Our blood’s been spilled upon the wet grass And we gave up before we had it all They made me feel defiled and crass Will we ever tear down/ Antonine’s wall?