MY first try at composing.

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Song : Unbreakable Attitude (Instrumental) -> (I need a singer!) ... It is a song about the positiviness of going through life with a positive mood, no matter what tragedies and letdowns you experience (the instrumental section portrays the bad things).

A bit Influenced by Rick Wakeman ... and rhythmically influenced by Kill Bill and We Will Rock You?!. Since I cannot play the drums, I had to play the rhythms with wind instruments created by my keyboard.

It is an instrumental on a pop structure of 'intro' - 'verse' - 'chorus' - 'verse' - 'chorus' - 'dark instrumental bridge' (proggy) - 'verse on a loop with synth solo ending in a fadeout'

I only have about 2 years of experience in the keyboards, and from that time, I didn't play that often.

I got this song recorded about 5 months ago in my keyboard as a simple track. Yestersday and today, I decided to play around with the melodies and add up more instruments to it and this was the result.

Shortly, I may do the same to the other track I have recorded and re-record it and save it on an Mp3 file. The other track is longer and has prog structures as well as acoustic guitar playing.

Comments, critiques, and suggestions to improve the track are welcome.

PS: If you mention the bass at around minute 4, I already know that slight error. If you lower the bass volume, it is less noticeable. I will fix it later when I have free time.

Thanks for the reply and the criticisms. This song was initially done to contain vocals (the problem is that my voice is terrible and I am as accented as Eloy's singer). Therefore, I'll ask a couple of friends of mine to add vocals. By not having vocals, it has the 'feel' that it is longer than it should be. (I am also considering making the outro solo shorter and the fadeout effect faster)

I kind of like the 'strings' sound (if that's the sound you mean). Althrough I'd rather have a bass player and a drummer play the same rhythm and take the string rhythms out.

I don't know what more instrumentations I could put in it. For example, I initially thought of putting a jazz guitar solo (done in keyboards) in the middle section, but not only does it make the section overdone, but also : making a counterpoint to the synth solo and follow the synth repetition + Piano riffs + strings is way too complicated for me (considering the time signature of that section).

This is really, really cool

The chord progression works very well

Ok, thanks for the replies.

I will re-record it, make that descending intro shorter in some way (or just remove it and try something else), fix the bass mistake I've made in minute 4, and make the fade-out start right at the end of the solo while fading out the song at a faster rate.

I'm also trying to make the other song. It is pretty complicated to do so since I have to work on the 'flow' of the song which is divided into 7 small sections.

thanks, I know since it is my piece.

The fade-out is shorter, the bass at the end is fixed, and the intro has a simple melodic solo in it.

mmm

That's about it.

I think Im getting the hang of composing. In a couple of hours I wrote this: