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    Posted: April 06 2006 at 23:38
Originally posted by Flyingsod Flyingsod wrote:

Originally posted by jesperz jesperz wrote:

Hi guys,


What are the things that needs to be fine tune?

What sort of lyrics is more suitable for this kind of music?

What are your point of views towards this song?

How do you feel after listening to it?

Some of your constructive suggestions?

Your help will be greatly appreciate... OH oh.. Wish me luck too! =) Thanks guys, Pa peeps rocks!

Z'



 Fine tune the drums in mixdown. they are a bit too loud compared to the rest of the tracks. from a compositional stand point the drums sounded like marching band drums near the start of the song, If that wasn't the intent you might want to change it up a little.


 I think the music works well as an instrumental but if pressed I would say  serious philosphical lyrics would be in order.


After hearing it  I feel like there is important life affecting issues that need to be explored further. Man, that's a bit wierd but its how I feel.


 As far as suggestions, the opening progression is good but I would shorten it a bit . Its a bit repetitive but that could also be helped by adding some other intrument or riff in like the 4th barr or something. It's a good progression though and its good enough to be reprised a few times throughout the song.  Bringing it back in a few times might also help the cohesion of the song. Theres a  lot of musical ideas in there and the song might benefit from having that cool opening progression tie them all together.

 Hope I didnt offend you at all. Peace.


Flyingsod,

Well, this recording was done in my room and what we used was a normal ordinary tape recorder.. so yar.. There was no mixdown.. But what you gave me was very constructive... I will take your words for considerations... Hope you won't mind if i put your words in my school's report.. lol =)

Why would you want to offend me.. You gave me constructive suggestions and i ought to thank you...

Thank you! =)
 

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Points: 564 		Direct Link To This Post Posted: April 06 2006 at 23:02
Originally posted by jesperz jesperz wrote:

Hi guys,


What are the things that needs to be fine tune?

What sort of lyrics is more suitable for this kind of music?

What are your point of views towards this song?

How do you feel after listening to it?

Some of your constructive suggestions?

Your help will be greatly appreciate... OH oh.. Wish me luck too! =) Thanks guys, Pa peeps rocks!

Z'



 Fine tune the drums in mixdown. they are a bit too loud compared to the rest of the tracks. from a compositional stand point the drums sounded like marching band drums near the start of the song, If that wasn't the intent you might want to change it up a little.


 I think the music works well as an instrumental but if pressed I would say  serious philosphical lyrics would be in order.


After hearing it  I feel like there is important life affecting issues that need to be explored further. Man, that's a bit wierd but its how I feel.


 As far as suggestions, the opening progression is good but I would shorten it a bit . Its a bit repetitive but that could also be helped by adding some other intrument or riff in like the 4th barr or something. It's a good progression though and its good enough to be reprised a few times throughout the song.  Bringing it back in a few times might also help the cohesion of the song. Theres a  lot of musical ideas in there and the song might benefit from having that cool opening progression tie them all together.

 Hope I didnt offend you at all. Peace.
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Points: 814 		Direct Link To This Post Posted: April 06 2006 at 01:56

Originally posted by jesperz jesperz wrote:

Hi guys,

My band had just wrote a short prog song for my final school project. I would love to hear some of your feedbacks regarding this song... We recorded soon after we finish it and sorry about the poor audio quality as I was recording just through a tape recorder. There are some musicianship flaws as it was recorded straight from the oven...

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After listening, I would like to gather some of your feedbacks as it requires me to do so for this project... You may try to answer some of the following qns... These feedbacks are crucial to me... I will be gladful if you take the time to give me feedbacks..

What are the things that needs to be fine tune?

Maybe if you repeat the theme of the song which is at  the start of the song,  at the end of the song again, the song could sound better.

What sort of lyrics is more suitable for this kind of music?

Well, I leave it to you. Maybe you could write the lyrics related to your personal experiences or views about some things that you see in the world, or maybe about a history created in your imagination.



What are your point of views towards this song?

I liked it. The first part has a good rthyhm, and the changes in rhythm in the next part are good too, with the bass solo. The drums are interesting.

How do you feel after listening to it?

I think that it has good musical ideas that could be developed more with more rehearsals.


Some of your constructive suggestions? You could re-record it in some studio as a Demo. I think that there are some recording studios which are not very expensive. Some people has recording studios in their homes, using Macs or PCs.

If you play more keyboards, the song could sound better.

Your help will be greatly appreciate... OH oh.. Wish me luck too! =) Thanks guys, Pa peeps rocks!

Z'

Good luck!

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Points: 233 		Direct Link To This Post Posted: April 05 2006 at 23:31
Hi guys,

My band had just wrote a short prog song for my final school project. I would love to hear some of your feedbacks regarding this song... We recorded soon after we finish it and sorry about the poor audio quality as I was recording just through a tape recorder. There are some musicianship flaws as it was recorded straight from the oven...

http://www.purevolume.com/nottoosure

After listening, I would like to gather some of your feedbacks as it requires me to do so for this project... You may try to answer some of the following qns... These feedbacks are crucial to me... I will be gladful if you take the time to give me feedbacks..

What are the things that needs to be fine tune?

What sort of lyrics is more suitable for this kind of music?

What are your point of views towards this song?

How do you feel after listening to it?

Some of your constructive suggestions?

Your help will be greatly appreciate... OH oh.. Wish me luck too! =) Thanks guys, Pa peeps rocks!

Z'



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