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Padraic
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Joined: February 16 2006
Location: Pennsylvania
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Posted: December 20 2008 at 21:48 |
James wrote:
Evening Patural.
How's your weekend been? Mine's been non-eventful... sort of. I was out Friday night but yesterday I was tired all day but didn't get much sleep.
I've listened to no music.
But I did have a chat in the club with a guy who likes stuff like Ulver, Patton projects and Meshuggah.
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Mine's been non-eventful as well, mostly doing Christmas related stuff. Haven't listened to anything either, although I did order Dun "Eros" on CD the other day. I need to do a huge Wayside order after Christmas in addition to getting the HC box.
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MovingPictures07
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Joined: January 09 2008
Location: Beasty Heart
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Points: 32181
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Posted: December 20 2008 at 21:51 |
NaturalScience wrote:
James wrote:
Evening Patural.
How's your weekend been? Mine's been non-eventful... sort of. I was out Friday night but yesterday I was tired all day but didn't get much sleep.
I've listened to no music.
But I did have a chat in the club with a guy who likes stuff like Ulver, Patton projects and Meshuggah.
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Mine's been non-eventful as well, mostly doing Christmas related stuff. Haven't listened to anything either, although I did order Dun "Eros" on CD the other day. I need to do a huge Wayside order after Christmas in addition to getting the HC box.
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Man, I really want that HC box... but copyrighting is so first-priority. Looks like I may not be getting it. Oh well.
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VanderGraafKommandöh
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Joined: July 04 2005
Location: Malaria
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Points: 89372
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Posted: December 20 2008 at 21:53 |
Rob,
It's dialogue I need help with.
The thing is, I once wrote three different intros (in different tenses) to a story after following this writing tutorial. My dialogue for that was much better.
But for this, I just cannot get my head around it. I want it to sound more natural, less stilted and more believable.
But it doesn't.
Thanks for perusing it though. Just send me an e-mail when you have the time.
Edited by James - December 20 2008 at 21:53
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Epignosis
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Joined: December 30 2007
Location: Raeford, NC
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Points: 32538
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Posted: December 20 2008 at 21:55 |
James wrote:
Rob,
It's dialogue I need help with.
The thing is, I once wrote three different intros (in different tenses) to a story after following this writing tutorial. My dialogue for that was much better.
But for this, I just cannot get my head around it. I want it to sound more natural, less stilted and more believable.
But it doesn't.
Thanks for perusing it though. Just send me an e-mail when you have the time.
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horsewithteeth11
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Joined: January 09 2008
Location: Kentucky
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Points: 24598
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Posted: December 20 2008 at 21:57 |
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MovingPictures07
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Joined: January 09 2008
Location: Beasty Heart
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Points: 32181
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Posted: December 20 2008 at 21:58 |
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Padraic
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Joined: February 16 2006
Location: Pennsylvania
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Posted: December 20 2008 at 21:58 |
How's it going BREEwithteeth?
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horsewithteeth11
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Joined: January 09 2008
Location: Kentucky
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Posted: December 20 2008 at 22:02 |
Pretty good FailingScienceClass. Yourself?
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Padraic
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Posted: December 20 2008 at 22:04 |
birdwithteeth11 wrote:
Pretty good FailingScienceClass.
Yourself?
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Drinking beer and eating Combos - yeah, that's right.
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MovingPictures07
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Joined: January 09 2008
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Points: 32181
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Posted: December 20 2008 at 22:06 |
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Padraic
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Posted: December 20 2008 at 22:07 |
"Pizzeria" Combos.
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Petrovsk Mizinski
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Joined: December 24 2007
Location: Ukraine
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Points: 25210
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Posted: December 20 2008 at 22:07 |
Ehh, just got home, figured I needed a break from the computer a bit. I guess as usual, I didn't miss much
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horsewithteeth11
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Joined: January 09 2008
Location: Kentucky
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Posted: December 20 2008 at 22:08 |
NaturalScience wrote:
"Pizzeria" Combos.
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The best kind. And hi, Harry.
Edited by birdwithteeth11 - December 20 2008 at 22:08
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MovingPictures07
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Posted: December 20 2008 at 22:08 |
NaturalScience wrote:
"Pizzeria" Combos.
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Nice. I like the cheddar ones the most though.
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MovingPictures07
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Posted: December 20 2008 at 22:08 |
HughesJB4 wrote:
Ehh, just got home, figured I needed a break from the computer a bit. I guess as usual, I didn't miss much
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Hello, Harry. How have you been?
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horsewithteeth11
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Joined: January 09 2008
Location: Kentucky
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Points: 24598
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Posted: December 20 2008 at 22:08 |
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MovingPictures07
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Points: 32181
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Posted: December 20 2008 at 22:09 |
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Padraic
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Posted: December 20 2008 at 22:10 |
Hey Harry.
I should try some BTBAM one of these days.
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Petrovsk Mizinski
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Joined: December 24 2007
Location: Ukraine
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Posted: December 20 2008 at 22:11 |
MovingPictures07 wrote:
HughesJB4 wrote:
Ehh, just got home, figured I needed a break from the computer a bit. I guess as usual, I didn't miss much
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Hello, Harry. How have you been?
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Been a bit away from the computer as you can see this weekend. Yesterday morning, went out to a guitar store, played a 7 string guitar, tried an amp. Last night (well technically today really, since I went out after midnight) I hung out with my friend Kellie, met her friend Tara, then had some complicated issues along the way that weren't meant to happen, but made it safely back to Tara's house and all 3 of us squished in her bed, and considering it's summer, the next morning we were all sweaty and yucky feeling
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horsewithteeth11
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Joined: January 09 2008
Location: Kentucky
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Posted: December 20 2008 at 22:12 |
NaturalScience wrote:
Hey Harry.
I should try some BTBAM one of these days.
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You should. Start with Colors. It's easily one of my top 3 metal albums ever.
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