Is it prog?

Thank you for your response.

itchy wrote: I felt that the sun falling down would be a much more sudden and unnatural event than the gradual sunset which seems to include the possibilty of a sunrise...

A doomsday poem?
This perhaps better exemplifies why I don't like that particular phrase. It's of course all a matter of taste - and I'm of the 'less is more' school and in pop/rock lyrics, overly poetic ambitions and 'grandeur' imagery turns me off. Also I feel that familiar phrases generally do have more poetic potential, and if you want to meddle with reality the way you describe, and for some strange reason would want to meet my standards, I'd suggest more clarity in imagery mediated through familiar language-use. Remember - I like traditional folk music.

Itchy wrote: As for mentioning that the sun is an entity which is incapable of 'falling' - you may wish to re-evaluate that thought... ALL gravitational and attractional effect is based on the idea of 'Falling'. The Moons orbit around the Earth is actually described as a fall, as the Earth around the Sun is a all too. The Sun 'Falls' around the gravitational centre of the galaxy and so on... BUT - it's my brother that is an Astronomer, I studied Psychology instead and I only understand it from it's most popular sense.

That is quite possibly true. But in the academic tradition where I'm 'brought up' (that be cognitive & functional linguistics), one distinguishes between two models of representing and categorizing reality; the folk model and the scientific/objective model of categorization. According to the folk model, the proto-typical semantics of the verb 'fall' would include rapid movement of the subject and a location where the subject falls upon. I wouldn't question that astrologers use another sense of the verb in their descriptions of the objective reality. But, again, according to my taste language-use in pop/rock lyrics should reflect the folk model more than the scientific model of categorization.

slatibartfast wrote: Hey, you write better English than I do Denmarkish.

thx.
Actually, the reason for my reappearance on PA was to practise my writing skills in English, and not because I have anything to say really :). I don't like prog much, only listen to it for nostalgic reasons once in a while.

Do you speak Danish at all?

itchy wrote: the possibilty of a sunrise

Reminds me of the magnificent folk-album by the Famous Jug Band (Sunshine Possibilities) The title-track is a little song about what wonders will come "if we follow all the possibilities that the sun can bring". I couldn't find that, but here's is another great song in which the conclusion is "The sun is in the sky. That is the main thing!."


One more thing. About being a nice guy or not. I don't make any judgements of that sort. Itchy seems nice and polite and the response is much appreciated. That I think the song sux has absolutely nothing to do with any evaluation of personality characteristics.  

Edited by Paravion - August 31 2010 at 08:58

Hi all, thanks so very much for all your comments/feedback. Much appreciated.

• A song about 2 people falling in love at first sight 5 minutes before the end of the world and trying to make the best of it.
• A song about the end of a relationship.
• A song about a death.

Paravion, you commented on some of the lyrics - allow me to explain:

I always find it amazing people get so hung up on exact phrases and wording on forums, like we have a teacher looking over our shoulder. Politeness is another issue and I agree with that.

..that was embarrassing.. 

Edited by Paravion - August 30 2010 at 16:30

Epiglottis wrote: Does it "sux?"

I'm not not Paravion. But Paravion is certainly (an thankfully) not a direct reflection of Jeppe (that be my real name). 

Edited by Paravion - August 30 2010 at 15:15

^I'll adapt it in my vocabulary of English then

This is the first time I've been accused of displaying anything near 'blatant rudeness' ever.

Logan wrote: The structure, and instrumentation, seem mainstream to me.  To me it sounds like pretty traditional song-based pop rock music,

It does, but it's not a particularly good pop/rock song.

The lyrics and imagery (as well as the instrumentation, vocals and structure) are cliché and mostly not supported by clarity and originality in expression.

Some phrases seem forced:

"waiting for the sun to fall down"

This phrase 'communicates' an idea of the sun as an entity capable of 'falling'. What's wrong the the expression "the sun sets" - it sounds much better and has generally more poetic potential.

"fading like a ligth faster than the speed of night"

Here it seems like the sentence-final 'night' is placed either in an attempt to 'creatively' rewrite the well-know phrase "the speed of light" - or because it just has to rhyme with light. In both cases - not a very good attempt.

"just a little bit
one more little bit.
just a little bit more life"

Is not a stanza, that is so good that it has to be repeated numerous times during the end of the song.

I fully support Logan's advise.

Musically very nice, great groove but based on that track, not prog.