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Queen By-Tor
Special Collaborator Honorary Collaborator Joined: September 13 2006 Location: Xanadu Status: Offline Points: 16111 |
Posted: January 07 2009 at 17:13 | |||
I wrote tonnes of crappy teenage poetry back in highschool and my girlfriend still has the book of it... I want to burn it but she won't let me - it's too cute she says. Wants me to write more. I'm back, by the way. |
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VanderGraafKommandöh
Prog Reviewer Joined: July 04 2005 Location: Malaria Status: Offline Points: 89372 |
Posted: January 07 2009 at 17:14 | |||
Burn it, I say. Love poetry always bites us on the bum in the future. |
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June
Forum Senior Member Joined: November 03 2008 Location: Montreal Status: Offline Points: 6521 |
Posted: January 07 2009 at 17:18 | |||
I tried to burn the stories I worte in high school (they SERIOUSLY suck ), but I just can't. I still got a huge pile of them under my bed
Burning these things are harder than they seem. Again, maybe a girl thing.
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Queen By-Tor
Special Collaborator Honorary Collaborator Joined: September 13 2006 Location: Xanadu Status: Offline Points: 16111 |
Posted: January 07 2009 at 17:18 | |||
^^^Yes I know! An ex girlfriend who wants me to die has a bunch of my "poems" I'm very afraid for blackmail right about now...
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June
Forum Senior Member Joined: November 03 2008 Location: Montreal Status: Offline Points: 6521 |
Posted: January 07 2009 at 17:21 | |||
All right, I can see that
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VanderGraafKommandöh
Prog Reviewer Joined: July 04 2005 Location: Malaria Status: Offline Points: 89372 |
Posted: January 07 2009 at 17:22 | |||
Mike stole my thunder... did you see my poem on the previous page?
Edit: ah yes you did Edited by James - January 07 2009 at 17:22 |
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TGM: Orb
Prog Reviewer Joined: October 21 2007 Location: n/a Status: Offline Points: 8052 |
Posted: January 07 2009 at 17:23 | |||
Mhm. I sort of get what you mean. At least, just about any song sung by Peter Hammill is deeply touching to me (I love the lyrics too, though, so...), and some singers seem to have a knack for making ideas that I don't like on paper work (Greg Lake, Robert Wyatt and Richard Sinclair in particular). I'm always sort of doubtful (as a bloke) as to whether I have any real understanding of love poems or whether I'm just sympathising with the other guy's situation. |
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VanderGraafKommandöh
Prog Reviewer Joined: July 04 2005 Location: Malaria Status: Offline Points: 89372 |
Posted: January 07 2009 at 17:23 | |||
Here's the next one and this is even more pH-like:
(May) Flyby Tours - Borodinosaur a.k.a. Sorry I borrowed a few of your ideas pH It doesn't matter if I live... or die... Why? I... fall into the maelstrom, thunder cracking on my back down to earth I (may) fall, but the (may) fly, flies itself to sleep, making my time with him a calamity. Of course, time disuades me, from ever being what I want to be. The (may) fly isn't a (may) bee, time forces him into many mannerisms, a ponderer, a wanderer, an organiser - of the Anti-Anteater Association. But at least he tries... Unlike me. I used to be a positive soul, waiting out time for miracles, but the materials required? Well they were out of Stock, Aitken and Waterman songs. I should be so lucky... Always popular, but never brilliant. I specifically asked for pot...ash, so I could grow some Amaryllis - I got some dead stoners ground up bones. Insinerated?, insinuated more like. It's typical, mysunderstandyng. I've been disqualified from the ratrace. Snow bites my top lip, as I fall ever deeper, time may start to pass backwards soon... The thrill of the hunt - my piercing spear, too elaborate to fly straight, it hits... me in the face, time continuum. No wonder the Woolly Mammoths died, they hadn't bargained on my spear - useless! I... want... to... spend time with the enemy, working out their lies and deceipt. To see why they have all the luck. If I open this door, will I live? Or will I die? If I don't open it... Well, what of it? Stalemate - a life of content. I can do that, yes. But I open the door anyhow... to find, another door. A hear field guns, is it 1812? I have travelled backwards in time? I feel younger, but I look old. Fitter and lithe, but with a stick... I poke myself. Then I see the (may) fly, he's awoken, as bashful as ever - buzzing around my head, dogfighting like Manfred versus Albert. He settles on my right earlobe. "Maybe I'll (may)be your life... away?" He says. In the confines of this... What is this place? I hear Tchaikovsky's 1812 Overture ...the door opens. Welcome to Paranoia, please enter. Geck0 - 1 February 2006. |
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June
Forum Senior Member Joined: November 03 2008 Location: Montreal Status: Offline Points: 6521 |
Posted: January 07 2009 at 17:23 | |||
Means she's not over you, I suspect. You don't keep stuff from your exes like that otherwise. Too weird.
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Queen By-Tor
Special Collaborator Honorary Collaborator Joined: September 13 2006 Location: Xanadu Status: Offline Points: 16111 |
Posted: January 07 2009 at 17:26 | |||
Oh... I know...
she's also a crazy bitch! But she's a mother now - child of the guy she cheated on me with and then broke up with earlier this year - MWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!! |
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June
Forum Senior Member Joined: November 03 2008 Location: Montreal Status: Offline Points: 6521 |
Posted: January 07 2009 at 17:31 | |||
I like that one better. Very up my alley lyrically. Totally picture Nick Cave doing quite a few parts of it (although he's not Hammil, but I mean it as a compliment)
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VanderGraafKommandöh
Prog Reviewer Joined: July 04 2005 Location: Malaria Status: Offline Points: 89372 |
Posted: January 07 2009 at 17:35 | |||
That's my preferred writing style. Taking the English language to different places and experimenting with new and old words.
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TGM: Orb
Prog Reviewer Joined: October 21 2007 Location: n/a Status: Offline Points: 8052 |
Posted: January 07 2009 at 17:35 | |||
While we're on this poetry kick:
Anthony and Cleopatra, Across the Void
Eyes now blind no stranger view And throw their light in haunting arcs Which sails catch, gleaming through the dark And we catch too, catch we two
Through the dark, I glimpse your reddened lips and sublime form, Kneel down to kiss your feet and leave a trace of my love there, I'd love to feel you by my side, when comes the saffron dawn, Stand tall to kiss your lips and run my fingers through your hair
I love you, as you face me, your back towards the sea, Frightened, as, behind you, the waters too swiftly rise, I grip your hand with longing, pull your body close to me To shelter from the rising waves and drown within your eyes
Dark and swirling waters leave, And take love to the promised land A downcast pair on vibrant sands Relinquish hands and quietly grieve --- |
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Henry Plainview
Forum Senior Member Joined: May 26 2008 Location: Declined Status: Offline Points: 16715 |
Posted: January 07 2009 at 17:39 | |||
James, so while I didn't like Crackow Klezmer Band a whole lot, it was interesting. It was like walking through a dark Balkan forest with the sound of gunfire in the distance. I think I am still ODed on music from all my listening during endless hours of working/not working on music stuff, so I'll listen to them again later.
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if you own a sodastream i hate you
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VanderGraafKommandöh
Prog Reviewer Joined: July 04 2005 Location: Malaria Status: Offline Points: 89372 |
Posted: January 07 2009 at 17:41 | |||
I remember this from before, Rob and yes, I think we agreed at the time that one line could perhaps be worked-on.
Line 2 of paragraph 2, if I remember correctly. However it's excellent and much better (and different) to anything I have written. I've not written a poem in maybe 2 years... I just have no ideas left in me. |
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VanderGraafKommandöh
Prog Reviewer Joined: July 04 2005 Location: Malaria Status: Offline Points: 89372 |
Posted: January 07 2009 at 17:43 | |||
You heathen! CKB are all love and no hate. They'll grow on you. That album is a 5/5 album for me and one of my favourite non-prog albums ever. |
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stonebeard
Forum Senior Member Joined: May 27 2005 Location: NE Indiana Status: Offline Points: 28057 |
Posted: January 07 2009 at 17:44 | |||
Reminds me, I have to pick up a toilet one of these days. |
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VanderGraafKommandöh
Prog Reviewer Joined: July 04 2005 Location: Malaria Status: Offline Points: 89372 |
Posted: January 07 2009 at 17:48 | |||
Don't forget to unscrew the U-Bend from the basin and remove the cistern though.
Edited by James - January 07 2009 at 17:48 |
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June
Forum Senior Member Joined: November 03 2008 Location: Montreal Status: Offline Points: 6521 |
Posted: January 07 2009 at 17:48 | |||
The first half of that line is okay, no?
Wait, these lovers have jumped into the sea right?
Or am I reading this completely wrong? If they are falling, well, yes then, I suppose the line doesn't fit in too neatly. Edited by June - January 07 2009 at 17:53 |
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Queen By-Tor
Special Collaborator Honorary Collaborator Joined: September 13 2006 Location: Xanadu Status: Offline Points: 16111 |
Posted: January 07 2009 at 17:49 | |||
Do you not have a toilet?
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